Update release-notes/2023-07/SystemsConnectionMigration.md

Co-authored-by: Melissa Hilliard <63749096+MelissaHilliard@users.noreply.github.com>

release-notes/2023-07/SystemsConnectionMigration.md

@@ -5,7 +5,7 @@ The current release is introduces a breaking change regarding the systems connec
 ## Prior to upgrading to SLE 2023-07
 
 The old salt-master uses a pair of RSA keys to secure communication. The public key is already cached on all
-accepted clients. We need to persist these keys between all the SLE versions, otherwise the client systems will reject the new salt-master
+accepted clients. You must persist these keys between all versions of SLE, so the client systems do not reject the new salt-master
 that would have a different public key.
 
 1. Open a terminal to the current 'saltmaster-0' pod.